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My first poetry – Butterfly

July 28, 2016

I wish I was a butterfly

with four wings

so I could fly.

Fly high and disappear

into to the blue skies©

By: Roberta  Pimentel

This was my first poetry in my life. So I would appreciate to hear your feedbacks.

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41 Comments

  • Reply Amitav Chowdhury July 28, 2016 at 8:34 pm

    Yes, finally, I read poetry from you. This poem gives a sense of freedom and the dream of a heart that wants to make a positive difference. 🙂

  • Reply A Pondering Mind July 28, 2016 at 8:35 pm

    I like it…

  • Reply John July 28, 2016 at 8:35 pm

    Id like to be that butterfly. ❤️

  • Reply flyingcolours603 July 28, 2016 at 8:38 pm

    its good as it is your first poem i think its good 🙂 good going

  • Reply Sumyanna July 28, 2016 at 8:49 pm

    I find it lovely. Excellent job for your first time.

  • Reply Advo. R.R.'SAGAR' July 28, 2016 at 8:52 pm

    That’s Great Thinking Roberta Pimentel Ma’am.

  • Reply Hans de Gans (MSW) July 28, 2016 at 8:54 pm

    It’s a good start. Just go for more. Butterflies are poetical, aren’t they ?

  • Reply Steven Armstrong July 28, 2016 at 9:33 pm

    Ms. Roberta, this is a great first poem! Please continue to write and share more! You will blossom! 🙂

  • Reply emotionsoflife2016 July 28, 2016 at 9:55 pm

    You have the gift. Continue

  • Reply Donna Marie July 28, 2016 at 9:58 pm

    good going first things first to try and did 🙂 i write poetry also, mine is “free verse” u do not have to rhyme feel the rythum with in u . let it flow and go with it. does that make sense? hope i helped and not hurt 🙂 blessings

    • Reply Roberta Pimentel July 28, 2016 at 10:03 pm

      Thanks 🙂
      Advice is always appreciate 🙂

      • Reply Donna Marie July 28, 2016 at 11:08 pm

        oh good i did not want to sound like i knew it all just being supportive. and what i feel too blessings happy poetry writing to you 🙂 blessings

  • Reply alvarezgalloso July 28, 2016 at 10:07 pm

    Thanks for sharing. Loved it.

  • Reply autumnchocolatebooks July 28, 2016 at 10:13 pm

    Really great first poem! Well done 🙂 Keep writing.

  • Reply Marquessa July 29, 2016 at 1:08 am

    Wonderful!

  • Reply rfdumais July 29, 2016 at 1:40 am

    Nice little poem.

    Ena https://prettyplusandproud.wordpress.com/

  • Reply J L Hunt July 29, 2016 at 5:54 am

    Nice 🙂

  • Reply Ismath (Ism) July 29, 2016 at 4:31 pm

    Great poem ! It’s so nice to be free ?

  • Reply Benn Bell July 29, 2016 at 8:08 pm

    Sweet!

  • Reply r_prab July 30, 2016 at 6:54 am

    Wow! Beautiful 🙂 Congratulations on your first poetry 🙂

  • Reply Andy Oldham July 31, 2016 at 6:15 pm

    A very nice first attempt! You will only get better!

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